I am a script thief / death gui

I tried to change the default death script at the end of Keep on the Borderlands with no luck and lots of frustration. It seems simple, but I didn't get it to work. I've been poking around scripts from modules I've played and still can't figure out what I am overlooking. I can't find a good/clear tutorial on the subject, but have some new scripts in place (untested). Hopefully they will work.